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First things first:
She needs to go through, add the bolding where we've asked for bolding on the template and check her spelling/capitalization. We're not doing it for her.
Abilities:
Pyrokinetics: II think she needs to choose one or the other. Balls of fire or Knives of fire. Not both. Also, she needs to tell us the size of the balls and the length of the knives, and how long she can keep up the flames.
Thermal kinetics: Needs to tone that down. She can reach vocanic temperatures? Volcano's can reach from 1292 - 1832 f . That's ridiculous for a first-time character. 25 feet diameter around her? That's, again, massive. No go - that's got to be toned down.
Biokinetics: Human Torch that heals her own wounds? No. I don't mind the idea of her being able to withstand heat better than others, but I think she's getting too close to the 'omg I'm a fire magician' thing here.
Weaknesses:
Excessive use weakens her. Really? Who'd of thought that!
Phonic resonances? Does she mean sonic? Or does she really mean... if someone tries to school her on her ABCs she's going to lose concentration? Maybe if they did she wouldn't type so shittily.
She needs better weaknesses. She's a pyro. Logically any type of cold should be crippling to her. Water should make her weak at the knees. These weaknesses need to be worked on.
Background:
"Occupation: archaeoiogist and historian"
Okay, this is misspelled, but these two actually go together.
"Skills: knowledgable in chemical reactions , an anatamy and biophysics and archaeoiogy"
" has knowledge of weapons and their wounds."
"Now she works for the museum of ancient history as a researcher , archaeoiogist and weapons historian."
"she had a normal schooling an excelled far beyond the expectations of her teachers."
Wut? No! She's not a super genius. She's a, POSSIBLY, 21 year old who had problems with the law and a normal schooling life but excelled at .. history.. historical weaponry, weaponry and what appears to be criminal forensics, archaeology, anatomy and biophysics?
No. She needs to pick something and stick with it.